The Rise of
The Skeleton
We were only a few
steps away from the Amontillado. Montresor pushed me up against the wall and
chained me to it. I fought for my life, pushing his hands away. I just gave up there was nothing I could do
he was stronger than me. Montresor started packing bricks around me. I just
thought to myself I am going to die there is no way to get out. Just as I said
that Montresor walked out of the door.
As
soon as Montresor stepped out of the door I heard a scream. It went silent, the
walls started to shake, and I just sat there in fear. The bricks started coming
out one by one. I didn’t know what was happening. Was Montresor coming after me
or was there someone coming to save me?
Bricks
were falling and finally I could see who was out behind the wall. It didn’t
look like a human at all it was dead and stood on bones with a sword in its
hand. The dead human just smiled at me. He said to me, “ I killed your friend.
Would you like to be free?”
“Yes,
yes please get me out of here!” I said to the skeleton.
The skeleton freed me from the
chains. As soon as I stepped over all
the fallen bricks he started chasing me with his sword. I didn’t know what was
happening I was so confused so I started running for my life. I ran past the Montresor lying there on the
ground with blood dripping, red poring out from his body. I looked back and saw
that the skeleton was right behind me, so I grabbed a sword that Montresor had
been using and cut the skeleton with it. Bones fell off from his arms and started to
chase me again. I ran as fast as I could running out of breath and my body sore
from being chained against the wall. I ran and hid in a corner, and the
skeleton ran past. I grabbed a bottle of wine and drank to a good life. The
skeleton came running towards me with a knife at my heart. I feel to the ground
and cried in pain. The skeleton just stared at me and slowly backed away to his
tomb.
Hailey - this is different. Remember that Montressor tells of Fortunato's death 50 years after it happened. Montressor has to be an old man at that point. Also, why would the skeleton free Fortunato or kill Montressor? There should be answers here.
ReplyDeleteNOTE: Herd - should be - HEARD. You also have 1 or 2 run-on sentences. Think about what a run-on sentence is. Think how you'd fix a run-on.